Last weekend on Friday me and my brother Christian played Gears For War 3 we played matches on the virus game then played until midnight. “The” next day my family went to the doctors to get more cream for me and my brother because I have some sores and Christian has infection from Samoa.Then we went to buy some stuff for my lunch on Monday then me,Christian, and my sister Serenity went to my church’s game which was at the primary sport hall we did touch and Badminton with Christian and volleyball which was for teenage and adults were allowed to play it . When we got home me and Christian zoomed in to our room and started to watch some movies on my brother’s Chromebook then we had to go sleep because my dad said me and Christian had to go sleep . On Sunday me and Christian played more gears for war 3 and at afternoon my dad said “do you two want to go walk” and we both said “yes” but we said can we ride our bikes he said well you can so me and Christian got ready and started to ride . Then when we were almost got to Pt England reserve but I fell down my bike and had scratches on my hand and legs but never gave up so I got up and ride my bike to the park that was at the reserve I was swinging on the swing. When we got home me and Christian showered and we watch turbo and went to sleep.
I am a Year 6 student at Pt England School in Auckland, NZ. My teachers are Miss Szymanik, Mr Goodwin, and Miss Parrant.
Well done Giovanni, this is an awesome story about your weekend. Good on you for using capital letters and commas! It is so sad that you fell over and hurt yourself :(
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I really liked the story.
Jisu
What a wonderful story.I loved how you added speech marks.Maybe you could add a bit more detail
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You could've added the name of the movie? I loved how you have added heaps of punctuation! Maybe you should break some of the story down into short pieces?
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wow I cant believe that you write that. maybe you should have more full stops, and commas because I was out of breath. but great job I like the way you explain what you had done in your weekend.
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